Poem~

[PlumSauce]

Grammar suggestions? Anyone?

I took in a sharp breath
and let it out slowly
I gripped my shiny companion
and was finally able to express
the things my mind screamed
yet my lips could not
even whisper

Am I  looking to die
or am I looking to be saved
But really for me
these may be
the same thing

Words cut me
worse than my sharpest blade
The tear me apart
But they don't heal
They sit there
waiting
to reappear when
my mind
cannot handle it.

[SaltySupreme]

This is a really good poem! I can't really critique it unless there are huge spelling or grammar errors in there or if some different words could have been used to really help the poem hit the reader in the feels. I didn't see anything to correct. ^^

[PlumSauce]

This is a really good poem! I can't really critique it unless there are huge spelling or grammar errors in there or if some different words could have been used to really help the poem hit the reader in the feels. I didn't see anything to correct. ^^

Ahaha thanks ^^

[Deference]

http://epicpw.com/written-works/sleep's-little-poens-c/

That custom format looks mucho familiar.

[Sleep]

http://epicpw.com/written-works/sleep's-little-poens-c/

That custom format looks mucho familiar.

Doesn't it?

[Bre.]

Doesn't it?

Indeed it does.

[PlumSauce]

http://epicpw.com/written-works/sleep's-little-poens-c/

That custom format looks mucho familiar.

Doesn't it?

Indeed it does.

Veri lost

[pikachuchu]

Grammar suggestions? Anyone?

I took in a sharp breath
and let it out slowly
I gripped my shiny companion
and was finally able to express
the things my mind screamed
yet my lips could not
even whisper

Am I  looking to die
or am I looking to be saved
But really for me
these may be
the same thing

Words cut me
worse than my sharpest blade
They tear me apart
But they don't heal
They sit there
waiting
to reappear when
my mind
cannot handle it.

Just one small error boo.

[PlumSauce]

Just one small error boo.

How must i fix? 

[pikachuchu]

How must i fix? 

o-o Just go to your post, click modify and correct the eeny bit of typo.