Roses are red violets are blue, blood is red and bruises blue date me or else.
Forgot to mention its based on medieval europe's serfs.._.
welp that changes things give me a moment i come back with some Trademark Axel stuff.
You don't want to exasperate GN Sleep
LOL evil! We're doing the same assignment and mine is crappier then yours! You said yourself, perfect rhyming. Dont change
QAQI need that ilne that says "IDKwhattoputher".Because I got nothing . can't think.
I'm so done with you, LOL.
Your work is unrivaled. Veri gifted sir.As for the poem, I think that you could make it more vague. You're telling a story through the poem but there are certain bits that don't need to be obviously stated (mostly nearing the end). I think that thematically you could make the poem a bit better, from the general flow of the poem to some of the words you used in there that don't match up with the more formal language in other verses. Their lives were all disasters,Their only fate, to die.Toiling the barren fields,As days and years flew by. They were treated as but property,To be sold or to be bought.They owned no land, and worked so hard,Yet their work was all for naught.The winter ravished their lives and homes,For they could not farm the field,Neither could they hunt the beasts,As they hid and would not yield.They prayed to God most piously,Religion kept them tied.The only dream for them in life, Was heaven once they died.^ I just rearranged certain bits and took out the parts that I felt were not as strong or needed to tell their story (this is just what I would like to read). But writing is always tricky because it is based on personal opinion. There is no right or wrong poem or piece of writing. All you can do is keep writing and you will notice that your writing will evolve.
Mm, yes, but europe middle ages during one part (ok, many times really) had black death, that's basically what I was referencing.(Plus, I need at least 20 lines.):/ I would kinda rephrase the second last stanza (I like the last one) a bit, but it takes me like 15 minutes to think it up all over again differently with approx. same message. Because rhyming. E_E
You dont need to come up with a new one! Rearranging your writing will allow you to make the same impact with less informal language. For ex:For one day, there came the plague,The Earth's most deadly foe,It stole their health, their friends, their lives,And left them filled with woe.
^Really good..rrearrangement..but..Does not follow my rhmying patterns.*sob*sI'm probably just going to leave those that way T^T what I really need onw tho is something to put in the ***.Because braindead.
