D: I think i rhymed it pretty well! Usually when I write it just spills out, I don't think hard about it, SO; to me none of it seems forced when I read it.The title is Demonic Birth. If that gives you anymore insight. *hint* the last line *hint* Lol, my friend thought it was about a three some as well >_< I like the last two stanzas of your poem, though I don't really understand the rest of it, haha (: Can tell you have some nice talent though. I don't prefer to use such a vocabulary because it's not as easy to rhyme (which I like most of the time) Lol.
That's awesome, you're really gifted .
You People are really giftedthis is just a funny story i wrote when i was 11 or so, so i doesnt have anything to do with the laws of this world lol.THE SWIM (duh duh duhhhhh)*Shiver, Shiver, Shiver* Now, I know you are wondering why I am 30,000 feet in the air in a helicopter surrounded by beautiful lady doctors and nurses (young and all single) with needles? Well, I won’t tell you! Ok, now I’ll tell you. It all started a few hours ago when I woke up this morning felling on top of the world (The reason why I felt so because I was actually on top of the world, you know the top part (crust) of the world.) I got out of my bedroom found out I woke up early (around 2:00 am) and went back to bed then woke up again (around 7:00) watched T.V until 7:30 am then ate breakfast went back in my bedroom lied down for 15 minutes then took a shower. In the shower, I sang a song (Namely the song I hate the most September Morning.) (The reason why I sang it was stuck in my head all day.) When I got out the shower it was 8:30pm I mean 8:30am, I watched Dora I mean action packed Kong fu fighting until 10:30am then I “tried” to get to dressed (I “tried” to get dressed because I was busy watching Dora I mean kug fu packed action I mean packed fu Kong fighted I mean, you know what?! Who cares if I watch Dora!!! ) Anyway, when I was finished getting dressed, I got some beach clothes on, got in the car and went to the.......BEACH!!! Ha! Ha! I guess you never know I was going to the beach ha! Well, on my way to the beach, I saw a plane, a squirrel, a rat, a chipmunk, another plane, another squirrel, a person, another person, another chipmunk, a chair, a table, a grass, another grass, another grass, another grass, Let’s just say I saw 1,303,562.123 grass ( the point part is because I also saw some half eaten grass too.) So what if I like to count a lot. Oh yes, and another squirrel. At the beach (finally) I ate (around 11:00am) and went in the water at 11:35am. That’s when the real scare started........ I went into the “freezing” cold water (I called it “freezing” because I actually saw a frozen fish in the water.) (I also tell lies so believe at your own fate. HA! HA! HA!)Ok, now I was having fun for a while (about 5 seconds) then, I went out too far and almost drowned. While I was almost drowning, I was calling for help (not because I was almost drowning but because I saw an extremely large jelly fish swimming in a zigzag towards me.) (Don’t ask me why) I tried to fight by biting it (the reason why I bit it is because I thought it would taste like jelly.) but it tasted awful like no jelly ever before known to human kind.(Maybe because it was a grandmother jelly.) But then, (After the death of grandmother jelly-the one I bit) out of the blue 1591 jelly fishes (to be exact) appeared in the water. I was so scared that I pied my pants 65 times over, then. (Sleeping) ZZz, ZZz, Huh? What? How? Who? Oh, ok well, I peed my pants 65 times over, then, (long pause) the electric shock of my 9 lives!!! (Oh yes I’m not a spider just because I said I have 9 lives.) Now I only have 1 single life and had to wait a whole 30 minutes because of the frozen fish. (HA! HA! HA!) Then was rushed to the hospital. And that’s how I’m here right now, (Shiver, Shiver, Shiver) 30,000 feet in the air in a helicopter surrounded by beautiful lady doctors and nurses (young and all single) with needles. (Sleeping) ZZz, ZZz, WAIT A SECOND!!!! DID I SAY.......? N, N, NEEDLES??!!!!!!!! Wait ladies, maybe we can work something out? What oh, oh, oh no!!! Not the needles NO! NO! NO! NO! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.............................. (Ouch) (Cry) srry about that its so humbled together
Elu, that souds like an awesome story coming along, I can't even explain how I feel about it right now xD. Really liking the last few parts. Ashneil, that was really random =PI don't really like this piece but I guess it's alright; had to right it for my friend for this little contest thingy.Small and cold,Insignificant world,Cut and bound by all beautiful pleasures, Held down and summed up by today's measures.The real world is such a beautiful place,I'm only to be held down by this terrible lace,If only I could see such a pretty face,I would rather die and wither in this place. This place so wretched, it makes me curl,Up to all the dark soil I'm use to wallowing in.Small and cold,Insignificant world,Cut and bound by all beautiful pleasures,Held down and summed up by today's measures. That which is thine is said to be cruel,Though white and perfect, it's beguiling. Smothered in lies written all over the place,Don't lie to my face when I ask you point blank,...Haste? Again, I'm made into something anew,For you, So beautiful.I am not what you knew...I only like the 1st, 5th and 6th stanzas.