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Just because someone is from another country doesn't mean they lack the political knowledge of whatgoes on in another country. America has been the center of foreign politics for quite a long time. Besides,why does the thread have to need a "point" to exist? This is, after all, off-topic.... and the community hasquite a substantial amount of American players, even if not as many as EU and Asia.Your assistance in trying to make it look more professional is greatly appreciated. As soon as I get thetime I will definitely go through and adjust the errors. As I said, it was made in less than 25 minutes, so I posted it prior to actually being able to review what I actually had typed out... thank you very much xD
I'm talking about in text citation, not the bibliography
I just skimmed these posts, but I would not recommend using the first person. Most of my professors detested it even if it was your opinion.
I had some free time, so I went through and made notes and edits in your essay. You can ignore them if you would like.Red sentence = Not a complete sentence.Bold words = Words that I changed from the original document.Underlined words = Words you should change in your essay.Crossed-out words = Words you should remove from your essay.Few notes: Try not to use contractions in essays. Spell out each word. Your essay is missing a thesis statement, and it kinda jumps around on topics. Otherwise, it is great.Hoped I helped some.
I was just taught to never use "I" or "me" in an essay, unless it is about the writer. Different people write differently, I just edited what I was able to see haha.
ye I was taught the same thing in high school lol. but then I get to college and practically all the essays I'm reading in the anthologies have "I" and "me" in them and I was like watI guess some professors are still picky about that, which is stupid I think since a lot of students absolutely butcher their writing into something a lot more difficult to understand in the attempt to make it third-person only
The third person is introduced so that the student doesnt write "i believe, i think, etc" Instead the student writes something like "X shows that Y is THIS and etc" showing a bit of a linear structure, which is why it is usually good writers who incorporate the first person into their essays in an eloquent manner.
Europe is doomd boys wait 30years for all these refugees to make multiply by 15 kids each family and start taking territories which dont belong to them